Wulfwald work in progress

A little snippet of the layout by Paolo.  A runic border will be added to the final version.

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  1. Ynas Midgard4 July 2020 at 13:48

    Looking forward to reading the finished product!

    A few observations, because I can't turn my editor-brain off:
    * the single quotes around "see" are a little off
    * no comma necessary after "victim" in 1st paragraph
    * add comma after "If they save" in 2nd paragraph
    * add comma after "will flee in fear" in 2nd paragraph
    * add comma after "If the victim fails" in 2nd paragraph
    * add comma after "If they save" and "but if they fail" in 2nd paragraph
    * add comma after "fails his ST" in last paragraph
    * remove comma after "people won't" in last sentence (or retain it and add another after "or can't", but that would look a little weird)

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    1. Lee Lawrence6 July 2020 at 02:19

      Oops. Not sure if we have the time or money for editing now. My fault.

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    2. Lee Lawrence20 July 2020 at 03:44

      Hey, Ynas I know you offered proofreading help a while back is that something you still have time for?

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    3. Ynas Midgard20 July 2020 at 15:04

      Sure. Hit me up at ynasmidgardnaule (gmail).

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    4. Lee Lawrence22 July 2020 at 07:16

      Cheers! Email sent.

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  2. Narmer4 July 2020 at 21:04

    I'm glad things are moving forward!

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